held back by willow and fishermen
water at the weir’s teeth.
Nice one. My next book is a collection of haiku as it happens 🙂
When is that coming out? Who is publishing it? I do love a good haiku!
It’s very good and I can see the scene most vividly 😉
You’re welcome to tell me to shut up, as it’s your haiku and not mine, but I’d prefer ‘stretched in (as) a grin’. An ‘in’ or an ‘as’ would dispense with the rather clunky word ‘like’. Also, a grin, rather than a smile, ties up better with a show of the weir’s teeth in the third line.
Comments, suggestions and support always welcome. Thank you very much. Grin is much more the sort of word I use anyway. And in the first line I think we could drop all those joiny words thus:
Much improvement thank you xxx Is it bad to edit your work after it has been posted it? What is the form?
I think it’s fine to edit your work. Even the most famous writers can have countless editions of their published works. Anyway, people find it interesting to see the various stages of a work in progress. ,
I did. And the sky didn’t fall on my head. God wasn’t angry and the internet didn’t explode.
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